Journal post: three
Title: Lord of the flies
Chapter2: Huts on the beach
Perspective: Jack
Title: All i wanna do is HUNT!!
shelter that so easy to build i could do it if i wanted to Ralph has no right to criticised me on my job. like every one voted hes the leader i don't think he is fit i should be the leader. they don't even Ok like they could stand up against the wind or rain and there were only 2 done but who cares what Ralph thinks all i want to do is hunt and bring back a pig. were having vicissitudes living here. well earlier that day i was in bushes hunting with my crew then i rapt a noise i knew some were there was a pig if i only knew where. then all the sudden piggy shouts then a bird comes. then i heard a pig noise again from a bush i through my spear as hard as i could then i ran to it of cores mist. i ran grabbed my spear and hunted down those dumb fat pigs i didn't succeed they out ran me. i got a idea with the barb on end i went out and Simon was following me then all the sudden tendrills closed in on me the sun went down it was opaque i didn't know what was going on i felt like something was watching me. all i know is tomorrow that pig is done for an in my stomach i have a compulsion to get it.. if i don't get it people think I'm not holding my weight and who wouldn't want some meat.
4 comments:
I like all your information on the posts but you need to work on it alittle. Like capitalize your "i". But I like how you put the picture of the book on the posts =).
Yea I agree with esteban. You have to capitalize your "I". I noticed that you have some run on sentences that got me confused when I was reading. I like how you put vocab words in when were suppose to because some people didn't put there vocab words.
I like how you capitalized the word hunt in your third title. It emphasizes the magnitude of what Jack is feeling. And you used your vocabulary words.
Hey John,
Your blog is looking really good, you do a great job of story telling, just make sure you're using the proper words when you're typing. Maybe reread it out loud and make sure it says what you want it to.
Looks great and good use of the vocabulary words!
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